Calling the decapitation a ‘desecration’ seemed a bit over the top language for Jennifer’s given her dislike of the sculpture. If I were writing her script, I might have said something more along the lines of ‘wanton destruction’. Desecration implies the object was sacred to her which of course it wasn’t. She’s indignant because it was theirs and the Gills destroyed it for no apparent reason.
I like Mary Cutler’s writing, usually, but a couple of things have sounded wrong in tone this past week. For instance Ruairi may be keen on girls, but would he really say he was looking forward to having the Cathedral School girls at his ‘beck and call’? I sincerely hope he would know the expectation of such would likely result in them telling him to get lost or worse. It sounded a bit too much like the sort of thing Brian might have said many decades ago.
And the previous week, Stimpson putting the words ‘nasty, over the hill skank’ sounded unlike Will who may dislike Tracey but I really wouldn’t have thought he would turn on her quite like that no matter how angry.
Getting the right tone is important, isn’t it? If it’s wrong, a bell instantly clangs.